Thread:Loygansono55/@comment-69.248.254.45-20130616162730/@comment-5805740-20130623182611

Well, I wouldn't advise posting the rest of your lyrics just yet, because the tourney isn't for a couple of months yet, but I'd be happy to rate your verse. And I know you mean no offense. It's not bad, although a some parts could use a little work; some lines are a little short, and you should try to have at least one major diss per verse, one hard-hitting line that'll give you that extra oomph you need. I particularly like the reference to the crap battles. Some techniques to keep in mind:

1. Try to keep a good flow going.

2. Make plenty of references that people will understand, accompanied by self-compliments.

I know this is your first user battle, so don't worry if things aren't turning out smoothly just yet. You have a good amount of time to perfect anything :)