User blog comment:DumbleDoctor394/Doctor Who Vs Dumbledore/@comment-26261279-20140510213806

I do see rhyming in this, makes references, actually tried

For a first rap you did pretty good, I only have a few bits of criticism.

1. While I said I saw rhymes, you did your own twist to the basic formula, now this isn't a bad thing really, just odd, most people are use to seeing one line rhyme with the next, but hey, it's not that big of a deal

2. Try to make lines longer, that way it can flow more and look better

But like I said pretty good so far, with a little work on what I said and some more practice you could be a great rapper. :)