User blog comment:Element K/Element K vs MetalFire - Fifth Official Wiki Rap Tournament Round 3/@comment-3401602-20160910151314

I think I'll give it to Metal, a lot of his lines were pretty clever.

One problem I have with K here is that he seems to focus on certain "stunts" in his writing too much, without offering great follow-up disses or good insults in general.

Respect the role model  mod mauling this Maudlin Metalfire

Pacific participant placing this puny pacifist's pacifier

Like alliteration's always pretty cool when you pull it off, and it was cool here, but it just doesn't sound like it's saying all that much. It's just making real generic lines like "I'll maul you" and "I'm putting you in your place" look pretty.

On the flip side I laughed at the Trump joke and thought the "Call Dusk and Yobar on the track" line was one of the best lines in the battle.

I've also never really been a fan of the reoccuring one-word add-ons at ends of lines.

Thinking you’re hot stuff with your mess of gifs and photographs (Nope)

But you’re just borderline boring.

Take this for example. I don't think the (Nope) is even necessary; in the same line K mentions Metal's concept of thinking one thing, which K contradicts with calling boring in the following line. Now that the message reads as "Nope, but you're just borderline boring", it doesn't sound right to me.

I'm not a fan of the way the finisher "Lelouch commands you!" is worded, but idk

Metal had a pretty clever line that tied in the 'people-slipping-on-bananas' gag from cartoons and stuff in his first verse, also talking about the common 'vs. History' theme that resorted in a pretty smart punchline.

What kind of honor kid can’t spell kreate, kover, or kool?

I think this goes hand in hand with the alliteration-not-really-working concept I was talking about earlier, but to a lesser extent. As far as I can tell, Metal's directly referring to specific things that Element K has done, such as "Element Kreate" and "Element Kovers". I don't know what "Kool" refers to, which makes me likes the line less since it deviates from that theme and is also the word used to finish the line which sets up the rhyme for "Wiki School", which makes me think it was only used to do so.

"K-Popped" -> I lost my shit when I read this

Call me The Avatar cause I’m mastering Elements in this cypher

I have mixed feelings about this line. I don't really get what referencing Avatar: The Last Airbender accomplishes in a battle that seems unrelated to either opponent, yet the "Mastering Elements" part is a clever play on both the premise of the show and Metal's objective in the battle.

I like the Badminton line.

I don't really get how messaging someone late about the battle resembles lack of courage.

I wrote a lot more than I thought I was going to whoops

Ye I think I'll stay with Metal. I vote MetalFire.