User blog comment:Icey778/Rap Battles of Excellence Redux 19: Light Yagami vs Devil's Diary/@comment-25070213-20170712164334

So a huge disclaimer: I have no clue what Devil's Diary is so there's bound to be some references that go way over my head but nonetheless, here we go:

1. The transtitioning felt really weird for me because there's definitely no visuals but there could've been a form of storylining with italics or something. Heather and Georgia just appear out of nowhere without introduction and heck before I even knew they were there, Light was already dissing them. Also, honestly, who killed who?

2. References used multiple times that isn't in a form of a rebuttal should be minimalized unless it's something that can really be poked fun out of. L isn't one of them imo.

3. There were lines I just really didn't get like:

''Am I too close? Too Near? Too sweet for the potato chip to disconnect?''

Need me to connect it, should stay as your sane self well respected  

Too sweet to disconnect means that it's connected right? But then she says she'll connect it? I'm like Bieber right now because "What do you mean?"

In other news:

1. You're improving on the internal rhyme scheme - there's not really a wedged in word in there for the sake of rhyme and they make some sense and some nice flow

2. I can hear the characters which is always nice and very difficult to do with distinct personalities

It's definitely not a bad battle, it's just very... par? Yeah let's go with 'par' as the term for it. Those are just some things that I noticed about this battle and I know you can do better if you're in that writer's high mate :) Best of luck for the battles to come!