User blog comment:Icey778/Rap Battles of Excellence Redux 9: Medli vs Makar/@comment-25070213-20160617155828

Alright Icey, I'm going to give you my complete honest opinion.

1. You gave characters which most people wouldn't use a chance to shine which although a nice idea, you should have anticipated that it would be difficult to write for and that will be be the reason for many generic lines.

2. When it comes to the multiple line rhymes ex:

You're frail and weak, 

''your face needs a tweak! ''

Your fate will end bleak,  

in this sweet rap beat  

I feel as if these are better written as 2 bars as in:

''You're frail and weak! Your face needs a tweak!''

Your fate will end bleak in this sweet rap beat

3. Some didn't rhyme like "heat" and "seed" which peeves me. Another thing that peeves me is the uneven lines such as Medli's 1st verse of 13 bars.

4. Although the first verses didn't appeal to me, I was getting into the second verses. I give you kudos on those ones.

All in all, while this is lackluster (apologies for the bluntness), I guess this would be the most you can make out of such a suggestion. Although I like Makar more than Medli, he wins battle-wise.