User blog comment:Banybon/Banybon's Rap Battles: Homer Simpson vs Peter Griffin/@comment-24466042-20170808035604

Not bad, man, you got some good stuff in here. But lemme give you some advice if that's aight,

- Try to make verses that have are a multiple of 4 in lines, 8 or 12 is usually the go to. Not to say 6 is bad or too little, but when using a beat something like 8 will work and flow better to a beat should you use them.

- A few generic lines here and there, such as the lines talking about voices, or nobody caring about Family Guy. These lines aren't bad, but it would definitely be better to have more lines that insult characters in more creative ways

But, despite this I do really like some lines here that show clever thinking and punch, some highlights were

"My rhymes hit harder than that car that killed Brian!"

"You better Adult Swim away, fucker, I'm Quahogging the TV!"

And "Everyone knows I'm famous for beating the shit out of big, yellow chickens!"

You got some good potential, man. Just a few kinks to work out and you I can see writing some suoer good raps. Keep at it dude, you're pretty good, hope to see more.