User blog comment:DennisRocking/Overwatch Rap Battles Season 1 Premiere: Torbjörn VS I.M. Pei/@comment-31857282-20171124164251

hi yes hello

Crosby/ya things doesn't rhyme and especially not in Torbjorn's light accent, I also have difficulty with baseless/foundation but that's easier to reconcile

Rhyming Torbjorn with Torbjorn makes sense as a reference but it left a sour taste in my mouth being the very first two lines, rather than later in the battle

Mei pun was weak af and should have been excluded

The last two lines should have been reworded for real savagery rather than more an outward concept

What does "broke blow" mean?

Also, whose not Who's, and you'll still not you've still, but ye. (Proof-read to fix these simple mistakes. It's important.)

Otherwise this battle was enjoyable, I liked Torbjorn's characterization.

Could have done with more references to Pei's work rather than random puns to related things, but I understand why you made that choice.

Considering how broadly you focused on Overwatch (TF2 jokes, puns on characters besides Torbjorn) I'm not entirely sure that you'll be able to extend this series for super long without having to reuse those kinds of ideas, but I hope you do.

That is all. I think. Probably. Fun battle.

Insert great for a first battle joke here.