User blog comment:Icey778/Icey Rap Battles 4: Alesa vs Netnobody(SkydoesMinecraft)/@comment-3401602-20170910220314

Who in the who

I think I like Netnobody's last verse the best. This was cool.

some parts I didn't care for though.

How the hell does long rhyme with break or were you intentionally abandoning the "awn" rhyme halfway through a bar? Either way, weird.

"Please you're a distressed, depressed, mess that will never confess

And I contest to this contest going any further until you make some progress

But in the process I hope you truly kys it's for the best

For my son you're trying to possess, and I saw the hypocrisy, pest"

this like... yeah you got the rhyme scheme but it sounds like a lot of filler. I can clearly see the message she's trying to send throughout it: "You're a loser that can't admit it. I oppose your advances in this battle until you get better, but until then I hope you kill yourself for the good of our child that you're trying to take custody of. You're a hypocrite." The message is clear but I think you focused wayyyy too much on rhyming and I think it dilutes what you're trying to get across.