User blog comment:Dark Cyan/Dark Cyan vs Joeaikman. 6th Official-ish Wiki Rap Tournament Round Two/@comment-3401602-20170906011441

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first and foremost this beat is trash and whoever picked it should be hanged

Both rappers had one big diss against the other that I think stood out, Cyan's "It’s been four months since you last got over 10 comments on a chapter" and Joe's "A hack who specialises in fads and toon teens fondling his ballsacks!"

A lot of other lines, though, felt underwhelming. The use of words like "impaired", "vomit", "stopper", and "bro" to complete a rhyme reads like obvious filler just for the sake of making the rhyme. (Ik in an English accent that "pedo" is pronounced "pee-doh". Going for a multisyllablic rhyme with peen bro / pedo sounds good but the "bro" part is lazy.) ("Vomit" sounds like a peculiar word choice to describe something as "bad". I think that it was picked solely because it rhymes with "ironic" in the next line and not exactly to describe Cyan's writing, though you can make an argument that the choice is fine, sure. To me, it just sounds like an odd term to use in the situation.) ("Stopper". Come on man. It seems like Joe was trying to use the word "quitter" if only it fit the rhyme. "Quitter" would have been a better choice because people often criticize others for quitting something that they have begun to find difficult or boring and they call them quitters. Never heard the phrase "stopper" to describe someone the same way and it's clear that it was used just to rhyme with "cloppers".) ("Impaired" is slightly better in this situation as it describes why Joe is at a disadvantage because he made it so well known that he was upset about battling Cyan. Though, the line could have just cut right to the chase and make the diss rather than having this set up that felt unnecessary. Seems to me that it was used just to rhyme with "scared" and "prepared".) I think most, if not all, of these lines could have been rewritten in favor for another diss, brag, or whatever that isn't filler.

I think I'm siding with Cyan because he had two sets of bars that stood out to me.

"Sixteen lines is not enough time for all your crimes to get a mention

But I get it; drama’s the only way you’ll ever get the wiki’s attention"

"Congrats on finally conquering your yearly round one curse

Now try not to get banned or blocked before your second verse"

I find these two pairs interesting. The first one is an immediate diss because Cyan describes that he wishes he could insult Joe more, then in the next line gives him a backhanded compliment via describing that Joe has the rest of the wiki's attention, despite how he has it. In the other bar, however, it's reversed; Cyan congratulates Joe for making it out of the first round then immediately hits him with a statement that basically says, "Now that you've made it this far, don't get blocked and lose your progress". I just thought that this was cool, that my two favorite couplets in this battle were insults hiding behind the guise of compliments.

...Though, I find it odd that Cyan points out Joe's contradictions, then later contradicts himself with the "Starting lines with a question?" piece. I know the latter was on purpose to provide comedic irony, but the fact that Cyan insulted Joe for contradicting himself earlier in the battle goes against him just as much.

Like I mentioned before, I don't like the "bro" added onto "peen" just so it rhymes with "pedo", though Joe made good work of the low hanging fruit that is the relationship between Cyan and GIR. It's a strong finisher, but I think that's about the extent of how well Joe did in this one.

I'm gonna give it to Cyan, just slightly.