User blog comment:Icey778/Rap Battles of Excellence Redux 16: Alice Kingsleigh vs Dorothy Gale/@comment-4920659-20170107061634

I noticed your previous fanmades had lines that were pretty short, and now they went to be really long. It's getting closer to middle ground now, but it could still use work. (If you want to see if a line is too long, count the syllables. I'd say on average it should be 15, but anything over 20 should be shortened if the words don't flow well together.)

As for the verses, I feel like they could have some work as well. Both first verses kinda had their own self-diss, while Coraline started with rhyming the same phrase and it seems off. Besides that, some internal rhymes appeared to be thrown in there and didn't fit much as references.

I think the battles overall could use some work, so if you try shortening and focusing more on clever references, the quality could improve some more.