User blog comment:FrankieRapBattles/Mr. Rogers vs. Dinkleberg/@comment-4490782-20150323223136

Bobdave's Rap Battle Assement:

Rhyming - Multiple non-rhymes (article/tentacle, fun/simpson). Use of filler as a rhyme (ay/gay). Unusual 3 rhyme pattern that makes verse seem disjointed. Incorrectly stressed rhyme (ugly/see). Other than these, rhyming did not really break any of my fundamental rules.

Disses - Out of character lines. Irrelavent references (e.g. Squidward, Duck Dodgers). Certain lines like the final one were not really character specific and could be applied to anyone. Use of homosexuality as an insult is lazy and homophobic. Generally poor and basic disses.

Flow - The flow wasn't awful but the low standard of rhyming hindered it. Short lines like "No one gave a shit, when you died / Nobody loved you, no one ever cried".

Spelling, punctuation, and grammar - Spelling mistakes (Seatelle, Tentancle). Some weird comma usage (No one gave a shit, when you died). Grammar was fairly poor. Examples: He've (should be 'he has' or 'he's'), more beautifuller (should be 'more beautiful' as you don't put a comparative adjective after 'more' or 'less'. It should be the comparative adjective on its own, e.g. bigger, not more bigger or if it doesn't have a comparative, like beautiful, then put more in front).

Overall, not a high score for this battle. 3/10 maybe. Work on English sentence construction. I apologise if it isn't your first language.