Talk:Epic Rap Battles of History 46/@comment-5585392-20140912172708/@comment-98.222.132.11-20140912202238

Yeah, in a technical sense it doesn't flow very well. Maybe I'm just not understanding how it's meant to be rapped, but in general you want rhyming lines to have the same number of syllables. You can get away with not doing that every now and then to add variety but you're doing it pretty much the whole time.

Rhymes definitely need to be stronger. Here there are barely any, and half of them just look like afterthoughts.

Finally, you need to include more references. Epic Rap Battles has at least one reference for pretty much every line. I'd say sometimes they even go a little too far, dropping pointless trivia that is not actually hurtful to their opponent.

Overall, I think you aren't trying hard enough. If you want to make a good rap, you can't just put down a few things from the top of your head and call it a day. There's a reason the ERB writing process takes so long, and even during the recording process they're always tweaking things slightly to make them sound or flow better. Writing a good rap is hard work.