User blog comment:Dark Cyan/Cyan's Rap Battles of Literature 20: William Shakespeare vs Sophocles/@comment-27863968-20160307010921

"Dost thy got beef with the Bard?"

I think you mean Dost Thou

"This doth be the big time, one trick pony. Once again, thy shall be lost in time!"

Saying time twice seems a little repetitive and disrupts an otherwise great line

" Thy foul toad!"

The Shakespeare quote is "Thou are like a toad; ugly and venomous" or something along those lines, I feel using either of those adjectives would have improved the line, rather than quoting Hermione :P

" Compared to the household names I penned,  Oedipus  is not  Complex"

This is an overwhelmingly great line, but I wish it had mentioned a specific character from the works of Shakespeare who gave a good contrast to Oedipus in terms of character as well as being in some way similar. Perhaps Hamlet, with his raunchy relationship with his mother and similar royal status? Though, Hamlet is referenced later, but, that reference wasn't necessary, so IDK mixed feelings. I still think a specific reference would have been good. " I’m the supreme  Athenian  dream from the  Deme.  A playwriting machine!"

The flow in this is disrupted by the period, I feel a comma would have aided the flow more. Terrific line.

" I am the Scion of the   Dionysia,   with eighteen wins to my name

I even unseated Aeschylus, and escalated myself to his level of fame"

This is all just incredible writing. Props to you for this. A pun on (or similar sounding word to) Aeschylus preceding his name would also have been good, though I believe that escalated is supposed to sound somewhat similar.

"I wrote Rho and Kappa complete plays! (That’s 120, Pleb) Each one hotter than Greek Fire!"

This is similarly a great line disrupted with flow, I feel without the "complete" the flow would have been improved decently.

"Run with with your little tail between thine legs in the face of big Willie!"

I'm not sure I understand this line. Would you mind explaining it?

"Cease playing Othello. You should Go and Reverse your verse, and fix your flow"

Why mention Go and Reverse, especially when Reverse is just Othello under a different name?

Other than this, because I was too lazy to go over more lines, it was just in general some really great flow, some intelligently crafted disses, and all over just a great battle. One beef is that Shakespeare doesn't consistently read to me to be in Iambic Pentameter, might just be me pronouncing some things wrong however.