User blog comment:FrankieRapBattles/Crimson Chin vs. Major Glory/@comment-4490782-20150601012835

This was much better than your previous work, well done :)

Here are a few improvements that could be applied:

Avoid generic lines like: ''"You and your rhymes are nothing but crap / Imma take you to school, to teach you how to rap". ''If a line could be used against anyone in a rap battle, then it shouldn't be used.

Make sure that lines are grouped properly. You have some lines that had three rhymes in a row, then two. You want to use multiples of two for rhymes. So AABBBBCC would be fine, but AABBBCC sounds slightly wonky.

Lines that you only rhyme by adding a word in brackets are kind of weak because they just look like you added a word in for the sake of rhyming without it making much sense.

Oh, and to fix that line with the red box around it, edit your blog and remove the space before the line. But yeah, good improvement :)