User blog comment:Dark Cyan/Play the Game - Poetry Slam Entry/@comment-13974523-20151025015841

1) The inconsistent structure of the poem was somewhat bothersome when it transitioned into the different form of stanza, but at the same time, it gave it a unique atmosphere that complimented the message.

2) The repetition was somewhat not to my liking, as it wasn't symbolic as much as just throwing the words out.

3) The theme here was interesting. Very applicable to many sad realities.

4) The change from lack of punctuation to ending periods was a good touch to the poem and conveyed a fitting feeling.

The execution certainly had room to improve in, but the ideas behind it were strong enough for me to raise my thumb to. 7.8/10