User blog comment:Avatar XIII/Avatar Four vs LakuitaBro1.2 - Fifth Official Rap Tournament: Round One/@comment-4490782-20160726225749

I thought this was good stuff, but I gotta say Avvy won. I will mention a few things I think could use improvement though.

On Avvy's side, there were some nice punchlines but they were set up or completed by filler lines/rhymes a couple of times. E.g.

"The Fourth Avatar is ready to bring back the balance, I can’t be beat "

"Screw this attack, your comeback was wack, you’re not worth the hassle "

The times you really get those "oh snap" moments aren't only when there's a good diss, but when it's set up and finished really well with relavant rhymes and smooth wording. That's my sorta advice but ye.

To Lak, a couple smaller things.

Yourself and himself aren't a rhyme because they're both just reflexive pronouns with the same suffix.

I'd avoid using words like "bud" to get a rhyme for the next line as it comes across as a desperate addition to the end of a line rather than a clever weaving of references.

Ye, good battle, but Avvy had the edge because I felt his lyrics were a little more cleverly executed.